Working on the Final Script.

OOPS, this is a late post -.- My internet here at home SUCKS.

So on Friday, Taylor and I were working on the final script and throwing more ideas around.

When there's an over the shoulder shot (behind the husband) I suggested a pan to focus more on the male and the newspaper on the table for when he looks down and sees the article about the past earthquake. Since the over the shoulder shot would last a while in the scene, going from that shot to a pan seems too drawn out and slow.
INSTEAD we're going with a close up shot straight to the newspaper. This way the audience can see what the article is and how it affects the following actions of the male. I reckon it's good to have lots of shots at a fast pacing part of the scene. MORE INTENSE.
Also, rather than having an earthquake shake in the 'real' world as it seems very convenient, I thought maybe he could shake from remembering the tragedy. He would say something along the lines of 'ít's all my fault' and shake from the thought.
We want the woman to stay calm and collected to show the man that she is ok and to ease his nerves.

We were going to have a note or picture fall out from behind the mirror - this would've worked well if we stuck with the mirror in the real world actually moving or smashing. But since this isn't the case, it would be very random for a note/ picture to fall down.
I suggested that we have a small polaroid type photograph sticking out underneath the newspaper article. When the male sees himself in the mirror and the woman is gone, he slowly looks down and sees the newspaper off to the side, with something sticking out.
He would've been so engrossed in the article and seeing the horrible past - looking at what he's lost and not seeing the good in what he had, just that it's gone. His wife is gone. He never noticed the photo until now because seeing his wife fade away in the mirror has lifted a big weight off his shoulders. He finally accepts it.
The photo would show the couple being happy in the past and that is what he should remember.
We haven't written out the final ending to the script yet, but I really like this idea (even if I suggested it..) but I feel like it's quite a nice ending and ties in well. The final say goes to Taylor though and I know she'll have a wonderful ending to her heartfelt idea of this story :)