Working on the Final Script.

OOPS, this is a late post -.- My internet here at home SUCKS.

So on Friday, Taylor and I were working on the final script and throwing more ideas around.

When there's an over the shoulder shot (behind the husband) I suggested a pan to focus more on the male and the newspaper on the table for when he looks down and sees the article about the past earthquake. Since the over the shoulder shot would last a while in the scene, going from that shot to a pan seems too drawn out and slow.
INSTEAD we're going with a close up shot straight to the newspaper. This way the audience can see what the article is and how it affects the following actions of the male. I reckon it's good to have lots of shots at a fast pacing part of the scene. MORE INTENSE.
Also, rather than having an earthquake shake in the 'real' world as it seems very convenient, I thought maybe he could shake from remembering the tragedy. He would say something along the lines of 'ít's all my fault' and shake from the thought.
We want the woman to stay calm and collected to show the man that she is ok and to ease his nerves.

We were going to have a note or picture fall out from behind the mirror - this would've worked well if we stuck with the mirror in the real world actually moving or smashing. But since this isn't the case, it would be very random for a note/ picture to fall down.
I suggested that we have a small polaroid type photograph sticking out underneath the newspaper article. When the male sees himself in the mirror and the woman is gone, he slowly looks down and sees the newspaper off to the side, with something sticking out.
He would've been so engrossed in the article and seeing the horrible past - looking at what he's lost and not seeing the good in what he had, just that it's gone. His wife is gone. He never noticed the photo until now because seeing his wife fade away in the mirror has lifted a big weight off his shoulders. He finally accepts it.
The photo would show the couple being happy in the past and that is what he should remember.
We haven't written out the final ending to the script yet, but I really like this idea (even if I suggested it..) but I feel like it's quite a nice ending and ties in well. The final say goes to Taylor though and I know she'll have a wonderful ending to her heartfelt idea of this story :)

Final Script

Script 2 (Final)
So I haven't written a script in a while and I'm pretty bad at them...hopefully this is alright D:

Vending Machine
Live action character name will be Bob and 2D/3D character name will be Fluffball. (Just so I don't have to type them out every time).

INT: SPACE SHIP
MID SHOT
Fluffball is looking left and right around a spaceship and sees a button on the wall. The button is red and says 'Don't touch'. Fluffball then sneezes and accidentely head butts the button causing the ship to teleport to another world.
The ship and Fluffball shake until it disappears with a flash of light.

INT: HALLWAY (DIFFERENT WORLD)
FULL SHOT
A vending machine takes place in the hallway with Fluffball inside. Sparks of light shoot around the vending machine. The spaceship has transformed into a vending machine as a form of defence to blend in with the unfamiliar environment. 

PANS FROM RIGHT TO LEFT AS BOB COMES IN VIEW. STOPS PANNING ONCE BOB IS BY THE VENDING MACHINE.
A student named Bob walks over to the vending machine and looks puzzled as the vending machine wasn't there before. He shrugs and pulls some coins out and puts them into the vending machine. He buys a chocolate bar, but it doesn't come out. 

CLOSE UP
Fluffball is holding onto the so called chocolate bar as it is fake and part of the ship. 

OVER THE SHOULDER SHOT FROM BOB'S SHOULDER
Bob waits for the chocolate bar and spots Fluffball. They make eye contact.

CLOSE UP OF BOB'S FACE
Bob's eyes pop open in surprise, but then furrows his brows. He doesn't care that a never-before-seen creature is there, he just wants his chocolate bar that he paid for. He is angry.

FULL SHOT
Bob grabs the vending machine out of anger and starts to shake it. As the vending machine shakes, the environment changes. Bob looks amazed as he looks around while still shaking the machine. The environment changes from the hallway, to a beach, to a waterfall then back to the hallway.

The vending machine, Bob and Fluffball are all back in the hallway. The world starts to shake, there's a flash of light and the vending machine along with Fluffball are replaced with smoke. 

CLOSE UP
Bob's eyes are closed from the bright light, after a few seconds he opens his eyes to see the vending machine gone and a chocolate bar on the ground in it's place. 

FULL SHOT
He shrugs, picks up the chocolate bar and walks away.

INT: SPACESHIP
The once before vending machine is back to being a spaceship. The spaceship and Fluffy are back in their world. Fluffy faints overwhelmed by his little adventure.